It was small-talk, she hated that. She didn't talk over messages the way she would in person. She felt there was so much to say but she didn't know how to say it. Would she come on to strong or was it just what he was waiting to hear? She didn't like squishing things down into a tiny text message. It didn't say how she truly felt or what was really on her mind.
Some days go by and she wont hear anything until the afternoon.
"Just got back home. Hope your day is going good."
"Mines going pretty well, kind of busy. How was the ride?" She replied.
"Long. I'm glad its over".
"Yeah I bet".
Simple questions replied to with simple answers. It could go on like this for hours or days even. It was a little boring at times but she didn't want to bug him so she followed his lead. Although there was some lull in conversation there were times where they talked about what was really on their minds and didn't beat around the bush with mundane questions and chat. She said what she felt and so did he.
"I've really never felt this way about being with a girl. It's just easy to be me around you and you let me be myself. I really like how relaxed things are between us".
He let her know what he really thought of her. He was a true gentleman in his words and in his actions as well. He always made sure she was comfortable and had what she needed when they were together and she did the same for him. He made her feel special. They saw each other a few times a week, and stayed in touch when they weren't together. They decided not to rush things and that was absolutely fine with her. She needed some time to find herself and to figure out what exactly she wanted. Nothing was stressful or tense and she felt she could be herself. She knew good things take time and she was sure this was going to be a very good thing. Even if it they were moving slow, it was only just the beginning.
Week 11 is tough--you have to trust the reader and go against your instincts and training (students are trained to 'explain') and let the reader collaborate and imagine. To do that, you have to avoid dotting every i, crossing every t.
ReplyDeleteSo, for me, this starts very strongly. I like the first four grafs very much. But you chicken out in the last graf and we get all the things you don't dare to leave out. Honestly, I'd have dropped that graf completely. If this ended with his quotation, we would have the idea.
Yes, we would, Jordan, really!
Should I drop the last part and end with his quotation and repost it? It was tough though, I tried so many different things and I still struggled a little through it.
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